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#1  messenger 08 Nov 2004 18:31

Night time torture

As I walk through the vallley of despair, and climb the mountain of lonliness
The mists of chaos confuse my thoughts
I turn and seek to find if one follows me there but no one is to be found
Restlessness invades my body, and I tumble and toss, but to no avail
The sweet slumber of sleep eludes me, and wakefullness abounds
The night sounds echo around my room, each seeming louder than the one before
Screeching tyres, slamming doors and even the sound of someones snores,
I punch my pillow, I try a drink, but nothing works I am still awake,
What did I do to deserve this I cry, my bed now an instrument of torture, the blankets awry,
The sheets full of wrinkles, my mind tortures me with thoughts of things past,
And some not yet done,
And wait, there through the blinds I see....Oh no its the glimmer of sun
For me the night is not yet over, yet the morning has begun
The start of a new day sees me tired and weary, with eyes looking bloodshot and bleary,
But at least a new hope now dawns, maybe tonight I will sleep deep and sound,
And awake tomorrow to greet the dawn with a smile on my face and not a frown.
 




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#2  Tormie 08 Nov 2004 22:08

       Thank you for having posted something here messenger!! This place was full of webs   ... I need my little dictionary to translate you poem and I will comment it later  
 




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#3  messenger 08 Nov 2004 22:19

your very welcome tormie
 




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#4  TdaC 08 Nov 2004 22:32

Thanks for sharing your poem, it was felt very true and real.              
 



 
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#5  Den Tracy 09 Nov 2004 13:00

Everyone has had a night or nights  like the one in the poem.
Well written, Angie.

There is an abundance of different talents here, to say the very least
 



 
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#6  Paul Mon 09 Nov 2004 13:04

Damn Angie...how did you know I had a sleepless night on Monday?         Sums it up. Great words
 




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#7  RedHawk 09 Nov 2004 13:07

    
I'm not usually a big poetry fan, but I really enjoyed this!
Thanks!
 




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#8  messenger 09 Nov 2004 16:16

thanks everyone....gosh paul didn't you know that I know everything.....at least that is what my hubby says...
 




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#9  Tormie 09 Nov 2004 18:11

I enjoied it a lot   ! Tahnk you Messenger       !!
 




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#10  Ozymandias Jones 10 Nov 2004 03:53

Well written, captures the moment.

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